Campaign Challenge #1 – Last Kiss

The Writers’ Platform Building Campaign, hosted by Rach Writes, is cool way for writers and active bloggers to reach out and network with other like-minded people, thus building our own platforms and helping others to build theirs. The Campaign runs from August 22nd to October 31st and will include three Campaigner Challenges, the first of which is TODAY! Here are the parameters for Campaign Challenge #1:

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “The door swung open…” These four words will be included in the word count. If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), use the same beginning words and end with the words: “…the door swung shut.” (also included in the word count)For those who want an even greater challenge, make your story 200 words EXACTLY!


Two hours later (two!), and I’ve come up with exactly two-hundred words of flash fiction. Holy crap–writing in past-tense is such a challenge! So is characterization within such a tiny word count. I’m, like, really nervous about posting this, but here’s my best effort, entitled Last Kiss

 The door swung open. He was there like I knew he would be, searing eyes and rain-soaked hair. He didn’t speak—he’d always been better at quiet—but he reached for my hands and pulled me forward like he owned me. 

He did—I’d been his since the day we met.

I let my cheek fall against his shoulder and inhaled his soap-and-spice scent, soaking up a million memories with rain that fell relentlessly from the slate sky. His t-shirt was drenched and then so was mine, but I didn’t care. I’d never cared about the consequences of being with him. I craved his strength and weight and intensity.  

His breath was heavy, ragged, when his cobalt eyes locked on mine. The moment unfolded, stretching into eternity. I foraged for words to make him stay, but they were elusive. Always elusive.

His wet hands were slippery on my face. His mouth found mine, raw, insistent, tasting of regret. Breathing was suddenly impossible. I gripped his t-shirt, kissed him back, but the ache of loss was inevitable.

“I’ll miss this,” he said when he’d had enough.

He pushed me back into the house. My heart shattered as the door swung shut. 

Like my flash fiction? Want to read Challenge #1 entries from other Campaigners? Pop on over to Rach Writes to check out the list of participants. 🙂 


54 responses to “Campaign Challenge #1 – Last Kiss

  1. NICE!!!! Man, how I’ve missed your writing 🙂

  2. Oh. My. Gosh. That was amazing. AMAZING. And that only took you two hours? I wrote a hundred-word flash fiction last year that took me a week.

    Awesome. Cannot wait until your stories hit the shelves!

  3. Awesome! I love it!

    I’ve never written flash fiction either, so this is going to be quite a challenge for me.

  4. Hot! Love the intensity! and “foraged for words” – great phrase.

  5. Katy, I can’t believe how quickly you came up with this! Nicely done!

  6. This is very well done! Really. The female’s emotions come through strong and consistent. ~ Nadja

    • Thanks, Nadja! It was a challenge to incorporate intense emotion into such a brief piece. Glad it worked for you. 🙂

      • I thought it was a challenge to stick within the word guideline, too; especially when dealing with matters of the heart. Well, at least we both gave it a try! It was my first flash-fiction as well. I enjoyed this challenge so much. All the stories are so great. ~ Nadja

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    Awww…one last kiss and then he left her!!???

  8. WOW. Amazing use of 200 words! I’d say you’ve got the hang of flash fiction for sure!

  9. Nice entry! You managed to portray a lot of emotion in a small space. I like the illustration, too. It goes well. Good luck!

  10. This was passionate and intense! really good

  11. Wow, you’re good at it. I loved the intensity of this. Great job. Mine is #72

  12. Great job, Katy. I loved it. I’m afraid I missed this challenge because of some unexpected out of town guests. Of course, I’m not complaining. My hubby worked hard to pull of that surprise party. It will be something I will never forget, so I guess missing the challenge assignment was a minimal sacrifice. 🙂

    • Thanks so much, Ciara! I think you can still participate in Challenge #1. I think it goes on throughout the week. I hope you find time to post something; I look forward to reading your work!

  13. Why will he miss this? Why can’t they be together? Oh, the humanity! Seriously, it would have to be something pretty big to avoid such, er, passion.

    Aren’t kisses in the rain the best?

  14. Wha…? What happened? Where’s he going? Come bacccck!!!! (Couldn’t find a follower button 😦

    • I don’t have a follower button. 😦 My one WordPress complaint is that they make the Google Friend Connect a pain in the neck. You can certainly subscribe by email if you’d like. 🙂

  15. I DID like it! And I loved the twist at the end that he was actually leaving. Great details 🙂

  16. Love your writing! Raw emotions at its best:) And kissing in the rain? Yum.

  17. “I’ll miss this”? Well, there goes my heart, breaking into a million pieces.

    What a great piece!

  18. Nicely done! I had to reread so I could get 400 words of great emotion instead of just 200! 😉

  19. Loved this, Katy! Such raw emotion in so few words – particularly:

    “He didn’t speak—he’d always been better at quiet—but he reached for my hands and pulled me forward like he owned me.”

    Really well done – this was a fun challenge, huh? 🙂

  20. Ahh! Such angst! It actually made my heart hurt!! You have Flash Fiction down! I’m awful at it, too wordy. 😉

  21. That was fantastic! A lot of intensity and emotion in such a short piece. Sizzling kiss too.

  22. This was my first time also. It was a bit nerve wracking. You did beautifully:)

    • I was really nervous about posting, but it was fun to write, and especially fun to hop blogs and read all the other entries. There are some amazing writers taking part in the Campaign!

  23. No, sad ending 😦 Very nice.

  24. This is heart-wrenching. At least, for everyone who’s ever had a broken heart. Well written 😀

  25. Sigh. i love a well written kissing scene. THanks. I loved it. It left me hurting though.

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